Stick to the first cut.
The first cut you put on NG nailed it.
For this you seemed to only have added text animations, that are frankly, unnecessary. While some, like "has built establishments" are cool, others like "OnlyCorp"'s underline and the simple text fade on "Supremely Powerful Beings" seem uninspired.
Pardon me for being blunt, but they're pointless. They don't add anything. They just are distracting.
Trim the fat and go with the other cut. You got it right the first time.
Also best of luck with [AS].
Its dark in here now.
The first Days Of Our Lamps was a perfect example of unadulterated cartoon brilliance. The second, I'm sure, will rock so many faces off that they will make a movie about it. Probably starring John Travolta and Nicolas Cage.
This trailer whetted my appetite for Lamps to the point where when I woke up from the guitar solo induced seizure I was in all my sconces were gone and my mouth was dripping with blood. I can only assume that my roommate had punched me in the face with a lightbulb. That is the only explanation.
So I anxiously await the release of this cartoon whist I try and uncover my mysterious and sordid past.
Good job. Your hard work shows, for the most part.
Kudos. You did a good job making the cartoon fit into the real world, especially in the shots where he was sitting on a bench. Those were really well done.
I can tell you put a lot of work into this, like in the subway when the image would jump and the character would move a long with it, but beginning at the bridge I could tell that you started rushing.
While I like random endings, This one seemed out of place. If you had it happen to the main character instead of a random child, it may work. If you still want to stick with the random ending, it will also need to keep the same amount of quality as the beginning. It's a bit sloppy.
Also, this is just a suggestion, but during the parts where the film jumps and looses focus, if you add a blur (a little on the Y-axis on the train) to the character, it will look like he was part of the film, which may be cool.
You have something cool and unique here, despite it's flaws.
Keep up the good work.
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